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Counting the Ringsi
near my sick bed
he murmurs of how he's crumbling
but I'm still here
I've fought so long, I'm here
for a while I trust
I believe this, I must
even when it's bad, because
his faith alone is not enough
my random thoughts of how long
I have, and his thoughts of
"will she be able to outlive me" -
even at moments like this
it happens that
we hold on and speak of a future
ii
rolling restless this early morn'
you exhausted and I
drying up from a virus
spying through the shredding
of 250-thread count bedding,
between the hillocks of your shoulders
we never can sleep
in anticipation for what's to come
to plant the seed and watch it grow
though we will never see it bloom
for all the other things we know
and live beyond that fertile past
of what we did and what we'll do
as sleep will still not come to us
close apart, we dare not fall
from the tree that burns in season
counting the rings of our poetry
iii
the moon has set,
I wake in the dark
to the rush of wind
I hear him rinsing off
in the basi
ControlThe feeling came over Bill when he was out checking his trap line in the dying light of a winter evening. Eyes on the back of his head. He knew the wary scrutiny of the deer and the hungry yet restrained gaze of the wolf. This didn't feel like either. It didn't belong to this place any more than he did. He would have preferred the wolf.
He turned around, shook his gun at the reddening sky, and cupped his other hand to his mouth. "I know you're out there! This is private property! I don't wanna use this, but you'll leave me no choice if I catch you hanging around here!"
A soft rustle from somewhere deep enough that the trees obscured his vision. He waited until he felt he was alone again, then trudged through the snow to see what he could learn about the intruder. There were prints made by boots similar to his, though smaller. The thought that he outweighed whoever it was offered little comfort.
He cast one last disgusted look in the direction the tracks took as they moved away, then re
Mollie's Ribbons     I grew up in a small town just a few dozen miles from the closest water source—a slowly shrinking aquifer that squatted underneath the seat of Thompson County, our neighborly border. Fortunately, we hadn't yet been quite as devastated by our annual droughts as those in Oklahoma and Texas. Rumors would occasionally drift in with a tumbleweed traveler about how bad the deep South had dried up into nothing but an old dusty lake bed, but these flashes of news were too few and too far between to be counted on as up to date or even true.
     Once, I heard one of my distant cousins, a boy by the name of Harold, was said to have been caught up in a barn somewhere in Oklahoma during a storm where only the dirt blows—the dust and dirt block out the sun and the air until you get blown away with it. Apparently, poor old Harold had been caught up in that barn for so long (five days according to old Miss Harris) he eventually just smo
Long Time ComingMonday morning. Early, so early he can see his breath, has to wipe the liquid haze from the prefab's kitchenette window in order to even see out in to the carpark. But then this was how to get ahead, wasn't it. How to impress the boss, make your mark, all this working extra, working around the clock. So reliable and loyal and dutiful.
He glances up, peers at the white plastic dial ticking away above the doorjamb. Quarter to: Frank's due in by seven. In theory anyway. He flicks off the warmly ticking coffee machine, takes the steamed milk and teaspoons it out carefully across the caramel-hued crema, makes a fern shape on Frank's. A nice little personal touch. A sign hopefully of an employee doing more than the strictly necessary, a sign of an employee willing to go the extra mile.
At least this way, maybe he'd get one up on Michael, for once. Now wouldn't that be something. He can picture Michael's face now, the ugly fusion of fury and fear, deposed at last from his slimy throne, c
Empty GardensIt was a wine-petaled pansy
that my mother pruned from the garden box;
it reminded me
that I had blossomed late and wilted.
At fourteen I created pansy petals of my own,
waking up with hot-fisted cramps
and the proof I was a woman.
I was not a rose, perennial,
as I went from blooming monthly
to not at all.
I would rather spend a day
curled up like the fetus I may never carry
than flat on my back wondering
why God allowed worse women than me
to bear children.
Wanderer I by MarkusOskarsson MotherhoodI am a shrill mother, sometimes cruel mother
Thumping the bible of maternal knowledge;
If a mother were ever to eat her young
I can assure you it would be out of love
Digesting sorrow with the bone and sinew.
Communications 101Manning the phones at a crisis hotline was the only job I could get with my degree in communications.  I hadn’t worked since graduation.  Whenever I got a call from someone lamenting a decision they’d made, it was all I could do to keep from telling them they didn’t know what regret was.  
However, from midnight to eight in the morning three days a week, it wasn’t about me.  I had to keep people alive with my words.  No pressure.  
My line blinked.  I picked up.
“Hello, this is Brian.”
Silence at first.  Fairly typical.
“Hello?”
Muffled giggles and a click.  Also fairly typical.
I felt like I’d been punked by my high school guidance counselor.
Blink.
“Hello, this is Brian.”
“Hello?”
“Yes, I’m here.  Is there something on your mind tonight?” I asked.  
“Something on my mind and your name spelled backwards is ‘brain’.”  They hung up.
I had forty grand in student loans.

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First of all, The purpose of this journal is not to discuss whether or not fan fiction is "real writing" or "good." I don't really care about that, you do what you do, you write what you write. The purpose is to discuss whether or not writing fan fiction is good practice for aspiring writers. If you've known me for any amount of time, you know that I do not write fan fiction nor do I spend any time reading it. I hold the belief that aspiring writers should take the time to actually read and get a sense of what they like to write, before they settle for writing fan fiction. (But if writing fan fiction is what you want to do and it is the only thing you want to do, then have it. Just know that you probably won't be publishing anything anytime soon.) 

There are a lot of published authors who have spoken about their thoughts on fan fiction. some are for it, many are not. 

George R.R. Martin Author of the A Song of Ice and Fire series. You can read his opinion on fan fiction on his blog, Not a Blog 

grrm.livejournal.com/151914.ht…

I'l also leave this here: flavorwire.com/281936/abusing-…

Discussion Question: 

1. Do you think Fan fiction helps or hinders writing? 

2. (If you took the time to read through the links I provided) What do you think about the author's opinions on writing fan fiction? 

3. A lot of the fan fiction that is written is based off of TV shows or Movies, not books. (This includes TV shows or Movies based off books, which the fan fiction writer did not read.) Knowing this, do you think that aspiring writers who base their works off of actual books rather than movies or shows are better off than writers who don't? i.e. More practice with writing, since they have read the authors style. 

4. In what ways do you think Fan Fiction helps you with writing? In what ways do you think it hurts your writing? (More or less a question for those who write fan fiction, different from question 1.) 

5. Do you believe in the statement: "All writing is good practice." Why or why not. 

6. Any other questions or comments. 

Answer all, one or none. I don't care. Just know that if someone lashes out at me for being "against fan fiction or shaming it." I will know that 1. you don't know how to read. 2. that you jump to conclusions/over-think posts. 3. You don't like reading opinions that differentiate from your own. You know the drill. 

This journal is a mess. Sorry, not sorry. 
I enjoy a good joke or bad pun as much as the next person, but this is shit. 

For the fear of stepping into SJW territory, I'm not going to go too much into this. Since when did making racist ass jokes become a prank? Pranks are supposed to be harmless and not target specific people. The video below shows two guys telling "Black jokes" in a predominately black neighborhood, and yelling out "It's a joke/it's just a prank." when they don't receive positive feedback. What's even more alarming is the fact that people are commenting saying that "black people are so quick to violence" or "why are they always fighting." I'm sorry, but if someone comes up to me out of nowhere and tells me a racist joke, I'd beat their ass as well. It is unacceptable.



These insensitive fucks have a dozen or so videos under the "Pranks in the hood/ Pranks gone wrong/ Pranks in the Ghetto" category, which tells me that they go out of their way to harass people and want a bad reaction. They also act surprised when they get punched or thrown up against a wall. Can't even. 

Let's discuss. 

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She hasn't even written the fucking thing and already is looking for a publisher? I can't even. So out of order. 
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Thanks much for faves :hug:
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